Well, for being extra-late to the party, many others have already said what I would here. Excellent first comic, very wholesome, nice to see both parties enjoyed their ends, and a sweet, safe ending (not even a kiss - just a heartfelt nuzzle!). Thumbs-up for the cuteness of the style, even if you think it plain.
Rallies for that potential sequel you teased, as expected, or perhaps one of BGP’s suggestions - should the fancy for anything further strike you, of course.
And I’ll double-down on that refute against “there’s much better stuff around and i’m by far not good at making these”, for reasons leveled by BGP and MostValuedPony.
Extra emphasis on Valued’s mention of pacing; I was wondering why things felt so smooth when reading this, and that would explain it! You weren’t afraid to throw in pages like the one that just had Rarity carrying Flutters to and quickly preparing the bed, and you really gave each part of things their respective screentime (the whole opening with Fluttershy’s explanation and the two sharing an awkward look-away, Rarity’s inspection of Fluttershy’s assets/condition, for examples) without understating them or having them linger overmuch. I’ve also seen the sort of comics they’re referring to, indeed at one point so often that I was beginning to wonder if that was some sort of ‘the goal’ that I was just failing to grasp the majesty of, and the clean and crisp way you presented each action was very much appreciated, in hindsight. (I was idly thinking that the little arrows were a neat idea as I read through, as well as that the stream of events was easy to understand, but this comment put those thoughts into coherent perspective.)
…I may have rambled a bit for what was ultimately a somewhat short comic (fifteen pages and a cover is still a nice handful!), but uh… I was glad to stumble across it, and I wanted to reiterate as much… So yeah, seeing what you care to drop on us in the future, should you deign, would be cool!
Your comic was very wholesome and cute, which is a charm many cannot capture. The art and the pacing were perfect as well, which are also two things’ people don’t get right all the time, particularly the pacing. It was very clear what was happening. Often, I read comics and I don’t know what the hell is happening from one to the next, it’s like a jumble of motion and actions.
So yeah, I am late to the party but I think you did an amazing job! It would be awesome to see more, but either way I am following your artist tag just from how wholesome and cute this whole ordeal was.
@khaelin04
NSFW warning is “built-in”, as by default all NSFW content is hidden, and a person has to enable it specifically.
So, they will see the warnings if they try to find the rest of the comic.
Rarity didn’t really get any “helping out” of her own… if you know what I mean.
Didn’t expect this much attention when there’s much better stuff around and i’m by far not good at making these
The adorable style of your comic is what really makes it so great!
Much better stuff? I humbly disagree. There are not a lot of pieces on this site in the form of a comic. There are even less comics of this quality in art and writing.
The comic made me want more which is very good indeed.
Fun that this comic has some hooks which a sequel can make use of. Zecora her cure, twilight (or maybe even starlight) her magic as an ad hoc remedy, rarity her new found “hobby”.
your current filter.hghnghnhgn i really appreciate your and will take it into the next project <3
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O i didn’t mean it agressively or anything, i just wanted to note it o3o
I already wrote “NSFW COMIC” in the discription of all other ‘safe’ rated comic pages
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NSFW warning is “built-in”, as by default all NSFW content is hidden, and a person has to enable it specifically.
So, they will see the warnings if they try to find the rest of the comic.
Definitely needs a sequel!
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No promises, i have a lot of other projects and stuff to do. I do have ideas, so maybe one day, but i don’t think anytime soon